I am transient
a non-essential
a go between
hooked on survival
drugged on pleasantries
absent in reflections
hazy in memories
problems and troubles
are dearer than me
you hold onto them
and you let me leave
a castle in air
a house of cards
a dream, a wisp, a memory charm
the shrill of the good times
the laugh of the giddy
an existential difficulty ~ for all good memories.
4 comments:
Standing Ovation! Anki.
Awesome it is.
now i'll read it yet again.
wow! last lines just bought me. i don't want to sound rude and neither do i want to change anything but i wish maybe if the last adjective was more specific than "good", it may have been more powerful?
please excuse my audacity.
@aakash: thankyou :)
@sharyu: you don't have to excuse yourself dear.. you comments/suggestions are always welcome.. I was considering how specific a good memory can be.. but today I am happy and at a loss to relate to the existential difficulty of memories.. I will keep the thought in my mind to help me work on it. Till then.. please feel free to shout me down if you feel something needs to be changed here. I do not promise to always agree with you.. but I definitely look froward to hearing from you.
in your hands a single word becomes a poem...wonder when i can write like that...
:)
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