kuch toota hai kahin
ek sheesha sa ab mere dil mein hai
kisi ne khadi kari hai ek diwar
ab un tak pahunchna mushkil mein hain
hairat to yeh hai ki
dard nahi hai.. gam nahi hai
fir bhi khush rehna ab mushkil mein hai
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Octpowrimo - #11 - Connect
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I often just sit up and try to figure out what is it that i am supposed to be hanging around here for? which question is assigned for me to ... -
awaiting the discomfort of telling a lie I turn in my sleep troubled by thoughts not mine to keep not mine to believe.. sleep evades me ..as... -
Out alone in the balmy night just looking for someone to fight I stand alone by the swing fighting the frustrations from within Nothing.. to...
4 comments:
Firstly, the picture is superb. Secondly, so is the verse. However i would like to balance it a bit. Shaayari is like walking on a swords edge, you just have to manage the poise.
Sorry to take liberties with your creation, but it was so lovely i had to do it. So on a first cut, i did it this way:
Toota hai kuch kahin par
ek sheesha sa ab mere dil mein hai
Khadi kari kisi ne yun deewar
un tak pahunchna ab mushkil mein hai
Hairat ki gham nahin
dard-e-sitam nahin
fir bhi ab khushi
mushkil teri mehfil mein hai
no comments?
I have left my post as it is, just to let everyone know.. how beautiful it sounds with your edits.. :-)
Thanks a ton!!
Come on! The idea is yours the words are yours, the beauty is yours, so why thank me?
Maine toh bas idhar ka udhar kiya hai aur kuch bhi nahin.
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